An Attempt at Elkarîl

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An Attempt at Elkarîl

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My first attempt at Elkarîl--be gentle.

Jên Gtely Nxilmechîl chîn-bel tîlp tîx.
have king iliu-GENPL under-sky ring three
Jên Tely Elkarîl tâguch riddr tîlp mpêq.
have lord elkar-GENPL house-in stone-ADJ ring seven
Jên dda mîth Dduch add tîlp tîgg.
have `(` die human `)' ring nine
Jên dda pung pungmdelych Telyên Dduth add tîlp nô
have `(` sit chair-king lord dark `)' ring one

Does this make any sense at all?

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Re: An Attempt at Elkarîl

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justin wrote:My first attempt at Elkarîl--be gentle.

Jên Gtely Nxilmechîl chîn-bel tîlp tîx.
have king iliu-GENPL under-sky ring three
Jên Tely Elkarîl tâguch riddr tîlp mpêq.
have lord elkar-GENPL house-in stone-ADJ ring seven
Jên dda mîth Dduch add tîlp tîgg.
have `(` die human `)' ring nine
Jên dda pung pungmdelych Telyên Dduth add tîlp nô
have `(` sit chair-king lord dark `)' ring one

Does this make any sense at all?
I'm no expert, but it doesn't really seem to from my perspective - for one thing, there aren't any intentives.
Duxirti petivevoumu tinaya to tiei šuniš muruvax ulivatimi naya to šizeni.

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That was my first thought too— it'd be better to use ñap 'own'. If you use jên 'physically have' the experiencer should really be a body part, such as rîk 'finger'.

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Chîn-bel tîlp tîx ñap Gtely Nxilmechîl.
Tâguch riddr tîlp mpêq ñap Tely Elkarîl.
Tîlp tîgg ñap dda mîth Dduch add.
Tîlp nô ñap dda pung pungmdelych Telyên Dduth add.

Better?

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