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[GrinningManiac]

This is what I've been working on all day - it's an excerpt from an oral tale telling of the founding of the modern Oumish people and the tale of their forefather - the great King Oum.

Tiáchión iáberu Oum “Tiáchión tūga on-hāda butānī.” Huma ai cuáoilha iálerūna guóthenna dúirīna/dúiro ai iásnulūnahum da siúrtātan ai curīhum tig al-talama tiá crōuátan. Tiáchión iáiétaūnahum al-dúiragauāti uá al-sgaoiá ai sin-iápiūnahinna curī sin-cuáilātin iátarnaséir al-uáctarata al-galandúirīna ai iátrisgna sno al-lāra. Har al-ahhartiá hāda-egurlióni iátúigūna sin-piólóinan tī sa-uánna-lamī-ahharagīna iácludiūnahi ai al-cuáilāti bo siétiáiātin ai bréidīna ap on-har al-cūa al-bali iátogūna sin-croíbalan curīséir brata crēin pliúcin ap iátolgūna cláiponīna on-har al-bala ilā al-talamu al-cabráilu moru buruáhumā iátrisgna.

Thus Oum said “therefore here will I build my house” and he and his kinsmen cut down eleven trees and stripped the bark from them and placed them in the ground in a ring. Then they heated the branches of these trees over a fire and wove them into poles which each of them crossed the top of the trunk-pillars and met in the middle. Around the perimeter of this wood-web they raised a lattice-wall sixty cubits in girth which it and the poles they covered over with animal-skins and cloths and around the foot of the wall they built up a stone wall daubed in wet clay and they built and embankment around the wall that the ground met the great skin canopy.

[Matrix]

This is what I've been working on all day - it's an excerpt from an oral tale telling of the founding of the modern Oumish people and the tale of their forefather - the great King Oum.

Tiáchión iáberu Oum “Tiáchión tūga on-hāda butānī.” Huma ai cuáoilha iálerūna guóthenna dúirīna/dúiro ai iásnulūnahum da siúrtātan ai curīhum tig al-talama tiá crōuátan. Tiáchión iáiétaūnahum al-dúiragauāti uá al-sgaoiá ai sin-iápiūnahinna curī sin-cuáilātin iátarnaséir al-uáctarata al-galandúirīna ai iátrisgna sno al-lāra. Har al-ahhartiá hāda-egurlióni iátúigūna sin-piólóinan tī sa-uánna-lamī-ahharagīna iácludiūnahi ai al-cuáilāti bo siétiáiātin ai bréidīna ap on-har al-cūa al-bali iátogūna sin-croíbalan curīséir brata crēin pliúcin ap iátolgūna cláiponīna on-har al-bala ilā al-talamu al-cabráilu moru buruáhumā iátrisgna.

Thus Oum said “therefore here will I build my house” and he and his kinsmen cut down eleven trees and stripped the bark from them and placed them in the ground in a ring. Then they heated the branches of these trees over a fire and wove them into poles which each of them crossed the top of the trunk-pillars and met in the middle. Around the perimeter of this wood-web they raised a lattice-wall sixty cubits in girth which it and the poles they covered over with animal-skins and cloths and around the foot of the wall they built up a stone wall daubed in wet clay and they built and embankment around the wall that the ground met the great skin canopy.

Arabar ar Erar varo hurga icaknion jan.
Arabic and Irish this language present-CONT imitate
This language reminds me of Arabic and Irish.

[Thry]

Beji, la tume sie li sepaniolo idioma dui roi pi ria rua „rotua“ o lengua.
[beˈʒi | ˈla tuˈme ʃe li sepaˈɲolo iˈdi̯oma ˈdu̯i ˈɹoi̯ pi ˈɹi̯a ɹu̯a ɹoˈtu̯a o ˈleŋgu̯a]

Also, I think that in Spanish idioma is a better word for "language" than lengua.

Υσάμης idioma μαις φρεκύντη, μαις lengua αη υν τώκο μαις πρεστιγιώσο νίλλα.
We use idioma more often, but lengua has a more glamorous feel to it.

Η σης μαι πειώ, νηλλα ασχόλα λ'ισπάνικα κλάμαση lengua castellana y literatura ην Ησπανία.
And it's never worse, at school Spanish is called lengua castellana y literatura in Spain.

[Pazmivaniye]

Beji, la tume sie li sepaniolo idioma dui roi pi ria rua „rotua“ o lengua.
[beˈʒi | ˈla tuˈme ʃe li sepaˈɲolo iˈdi̯oma ˈdu̯i ˈɹoi̯ pi ˈɹi̯a ɹu̯a ɹoˈtu̯a o ˈleŋgu̯a]

Also, I think that in Spanish idioma is a better word for "language" than lengua.

Υσάμης idioma μαις φρεκύντη, μαις lengua αη υν τώκο μαις πρεστιγιώσο νίλλα.
We use idioma more often, but lengua has a more glamorous feel to it.

Η σης μαι πειώ, νηλλα ασχόλα λ'ισπάνικα κλάμαση lengua castellana y literatura ην Ησπανία.
And it's never worse, at school Spanish is called lengua castellana y literatura in Spain.

Â, dak telmê se sidan maṇ lu Hiṇliši da fê.
[aː | dak tɛlˈmeɪ̯ sɛ siˈdan maŋ lu ʔiŋˈliʂi da feɪ̯]
Ah, then I think this is a lot like in English.

Oumi maṇ Hêryi vû pi al- da. Ṇû maṇ Harabi da, la haẓnê.
[ˈʔoʊ̯mi maŋ ˈʔeɪ̯ɾji vaʊ̯ pi ʔal da || ŋaʊ̯ maŋ ʔaˈɾabi da | la ʔaɮˈneɪ̯]
Oumish is like Irish with more al-. Which is like Arabic, I suppose.

[GrinningManiac]

This is what I've been working on all day - it's an excerpt from an oral tale telling of the founding of the modern Oumish people and the tale of their forefather - the great King Oum.

Tiáchión iáberu Oum “Tiáchión tūga on-hāda butānī.” Huma ai cuáoilha iálerūna guóthenna dúirīna/dúiro ai iásnulūnahum da siúrtātan ai curīhum tig al-talama tiá crōuátan. Tiáchión iáiétaūnahum al-dúiragauāti uá al-sgaoiá ai sin-iápiūnahinna curī sin-cuáilātin iátarnaséir al-uáctarata al-galandúirīna ai iátrisgna sno al-lāra. Har al-ahhartiá hāda-egurlióni iátúigūna sin-piólóinan tī sa-uánna-lamī-ahharagīna iácludiūnahi ai al-cuáilāti bo siétiáiātin ai bréidīna ap on-har al-cūa al-bali iátogūna sin-croíbalan curīséir brata crēin pliúcin ap iátolgūna cláiponīna on-har al-bala ilā al-talamu al-cabráilu moru buruáhumā iátrisgna.

Thus Oum said “therefore here will I build my house” and he and his kinsmen cut down eleven trees and stripped the bark from them and placed them in the ground in a ring. Then they heated the branches of these trees over a fire and wove them into poles which each of them crossed the top of the trunk-pillars and met in the middle. Around the perimeter of this wood-web they raised a lattice-wall sixty cubits in girth which it and the poles they covered over with animal-skins and cloths and around the foot of the wall they built up a stone wall daubed in wet clay and they built and embankment around the wall that the ground met the great skin canopy.

Arabar ar Erar varo hurga icaknion jan.
Arabic and Irish this language present-CONT imitate
This language reminds me of Arabic and Irish.

Congrats - you have successfully unearthed my lack of originality.

It's born of skimming a Classic Arabic grammar and an Irish dictionary. There's Basque elements in there and a smidgin of Hindi whenever I hit something I couldn't understand well enough to make work in Arabic.

[Nortaneous]

Tiam vram an wekend in Nyw York beturnd. Thiarf y an ourseteng vryt, oth is hee glier?
[tʃam vram ə wəˈkɛnd ən niu̯ jork bəˈturnd. ðjarf iː ən ɔu̯rʂɛtəŋ vriːt ɔθ iz eː glɨr]
I'm back from a weekend in New York. Do I even need to give a translation, or is it clear without one?

[rr]

Kavu dase Örek Nbemban?
[kävu däse joɾek nbembän]
How was New York?

[Sevly]

Do I even need to give a translation, or is it clear without one?

Det damue ourseteng omue verasae doue dit sue dekoe ie tie.
/ˈdɛts damə ˈəwəstə ʊmə βɛrzə dəʊ ˈdɪt sə dɛkʊ j tɪ/
right that:on ourseteng REPORTED not:understanding but 1s under clear COP from
Well, apart from not understanding ourseteng, I found it clear.

Kavu dase Örek Nbemban?
[kävu däse joɾek nbembän]
How was New York?

Det, deue ue? Murst sue arie ue mee New York tee at sie tee.
/ˈdɛt zɛwə || ˈmβs sə ˈarɪ wə mɛ ˈnjɛʊ jɛəkə tsɛ at sɪ tsɛ/
right what like wanting under day like in New York to going COP.1 to
Yes, how? I'd like to visit New York one day.

As you can see from ourseteng and New York, Deevie likes to retain foreign spellings but nativizes the pronunciations quite thouroughly.

[hwhatting]

Egun fún Newé Yorcé pró duwai wetera.
PRON.1SG be-PAST.1SG new-N.SG.LOC York-LOC before two-N.ACC year-PL.ACC
I was in New York two years ago.

[Dē Graut Bʉr]

Iss iss nojjit dirr giassit.
I've never been there.

[rr]

Lofi ä Örek Nbemban avu i ani.
[lofi jä jorek nbembän ävu i ani]
I'm going to New York in a year.

[Sevly]

Det danie donie dert at?
/ˈdɛts daɲ dʊɲ ˈzrt at/
right that:with this:with possible going
Ooh, can I come with you?

[rr]

Ji?
[xi]
Yes?

[Sevly]

Temezen! Zert mue sokae ie det.
/ˈtɛmzə || ˈzrts mə ˈsʊkə j dɛt/
awesome flight on order COP good
Awesome! Book my flight.

[rr]

Nvin. Dasuri visecn seleve.
[nvin däsuɾi visetsn seleve]
No. I'm not your servant.

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Sukeme aci tipa.
[sukeme ätsi tipä]
Observe this text.

[Nesescosac]

Ekic Ñu-Jork t'y noâuntłák íp ýtłöò ùrùsai.
I am going to New York over Thanksgiving break to visit some friends.

[KathTheDragon]

Sukeme aci tipa.
[sukeme ätsi tipä]
Observe this text.

Hwé lézt?
What does it say?

[rr]

Hwé lézt?
What does it say?

E mtare, peiren.
[e mtare, peɪ̯ɾen]
A sentence, obviously.

[KathTheDragon]

Wórðt nei zwárá ár akár ðan, ðíat zpairit nei ín zpirir "hwat" en "hwé".
An Alakari wouldn't answer with that, because the question doesn't ask 'what', but 'how'.
(The literal translayion of 'What does it say?' is 'How does it read?', which can only be interpreted as 'What words are written down?')

[rr]

Venc, nusuvi i Alakari. Nuase sncaner visecn dago siecn taseco.
Well, I'm not an Alakari. It is not my job to analyze your message.

[KathTheDragon]

Gevam ár átlr.
I'm just commenting.

[rr]

N suvi.
As am I.

[Dē Graut Bʉr]

Hwé lézt?
What does it say?

E mtare, peiren.
[e mtare, peɪ̯ɾen]
A sentence, obviously.

Kuss ji zegg wass dē dúlighyt oss dē sinn zyt?
Could you tell what that sentence means?

[rr]

Ji. Deg: Ase ntos cas jangul kutorenecn oragänzi larabi, kutös.
Yes. It means: Kutorenian's script system, Kutos, is similar to Hangeul.

Dacmri aconidh nuramidh penzheti ino kutorene pa dar do landeze idn changä.
I created five irregular verbs in Kutorenian to give the language some variety.

[äreo]

Dénorén fberea musan. Do dénorén nenoa. Icá, ea sbarnea.
Irregular verbs are fun. So are irregular nouns. Also, I'm back.